I am her Snake
She is my Eve
But it’s me
She deceives,
So what does
That make she?
I am smooth
Irresistible
She bathe
in my words,
only to realise
she deeply in love.
Confused
Know not which one
To choose
I coil round her
Hypnotise her
Slowly
Smoothly
Wrap tightly round her curves
She screams.
I let her go
And swam away
On dry land
She eats fruits
no more
cause she
fell into my hands
yes
desire
fire
will remain mine
play
only at your own risk
kiss
if you are in it for the bliss
blind
because I shine
warning:
Hide
Do not look into my eyes
My words are sweet
Sweeter than Haribos
But bitter lies
Fly away birds
Come to me curious cats
Your hats won’t hide your shame
Is it me you Blame?
I
Told you
To play
At your own risk
Now lets kiss
And start it all over
Again
Resist me
If you can.
Shaun Gordon aka Donusho
02/08/2010© (2007)
oh. mesmerizing verse...remins me of the boa in the jungle book with the spinning eyes...resist me if you dare...nicely played one shot!
ReplyDeleteInteresting poem. I like the serpent-like slithering down the page as well.
ReplyDeleteNice one Shaun, you little devil!
ReplyDelete..i mean if you told her to play at her own risk…and yet - sometimes you know about the lies and still hope for more…wonder if she manages to resist next time..
ReplyDeleteahaaa..so powerful ..that much love can do..:) great one shot :)
ReplyDeleteThe flow in your poem seems to pick up speed as the lines condense toward the end. Appreciate the One Shot! cheers
ReplyDeleteThis piece is interesting and innovative. I believe you wrote it purposefully this way with subject/verb out of sync at times. I wasn't sure but it sort of works. The language sounds somewhat like a journey into pre-language, a kind of look at the pre-historic garden. I liked the little nod to JKRowland with the "don't look into the eyes". Nice work. Thanks for posting.
ReplyDeleteShaun - I am so glad you found us at One Shot
ReplyDeleteentranced by those words.Who could resist his charms???
moon smiles
Thank you everyone for your encouraging words. I am very glad to have found one shot. Sending Big hugs and smiles to you all, Donusho.
ReplyDeleteshaun..a wonderful verse...i think moondust was right about being entranced..but i loved the mention of haribo..so very english..mate this was a great poem you should be very pleased with yourself..by the way i am an essex boy & part of the one shot team..cheers and look forward to seeing more..pete
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