Uninvited advise descended
to look my sunday's best everyday.
Everyday? That was a triple dare to myself to ask why!
And undeniably it was,
to feel good at the sound
of the shiney mirrored black shoes
upon the pavemment,
as though I was being
a man about his daily business...
Walking towards
the gigantic red bricked building
and shuddering
at the sound of the bell
that resembled thunder.
Staring at everyone singing
those dry high pitched hymns
that became muffled,
in the midst of daydreams
and boredom's torment.
Why did they come here?
I didnt care:
beside inhaling the fresh air
after leaving that cave
was a wonderous relief,
it made me happy revealing little white pearl teeths
Kicking cola cans and scoring goals
with repaired knee patches
from a week ago's, injuries.
My belief's?
In my books having true freedom,
a stylish look.
Shaun Gordon aka Donusho 5/10/2010 ©
Nice, and I love the picture - handsome young men completed by the ending full circle --stylish write...bkm
ReplyDeleteHi Bkm, how are you? Glad you enjoyed this piece - thank you for comments.
ReplyDeleteGreat photograph! So stylish!
ReplyDeleteChurch going as a youngster is pretty much the same everywhere. Wouldn't we all rather worship outside?
Amen Everyday Goddess!
ReplyDeletethat's a good feeling,
ReplyDeletekeep shining.
love the image,
This was very interesting and I loved the pic and the piece you wrote with it.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing
Wysteria
i liked both - the pic and the poem
ReplyDelete..loved the details like the little white pearl teeths..
This is a real 'slice-of-life' piece, Donsho... it brings to mind Langston Hughes, and that's a great compliment. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteActually, I miss that today - dressing up for church. We're not so stylish any more.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
A great one, Donusho. I liked it very much...
ReplyDeleteॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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love that kicking the can...i got in so much trouble for what i did dressed up in my sunday best...looks like a great crew you had there...nice one shot!
ReplyDeletehi shaun...how you been? good to see this wonderful piece linked up....a great write as always...pete
ReplyDeleteVery nice! @ Everyday Goddess- Of course we would all rather worship outside!
ReplyDeleteI think we do all have similar memories of church as kids, and of wondering why we're told to "look our best" when what we really want to do is run wild and get rips in the knees of our pants.
Great write and wonderful picture to go with!
Thank you everyone for your comments. You all make me feel so blessed!!
ReplyDelete@Pete, i am very well thanks, just really been hectic at work so if things happen a little slowly it not intentional. I want to keep this new love and passion for poetry alive! Maybe i should go on a time management course!? hmmm there a thought!
@Brian, lets go back there in our minds and kick cans again (smile)
@awitchtrying, you are sure right.. though i do remember attending a service in the field once... not the same as kicking the can though, haha.. thank you for your comment.
@Glynn, come on let's get stylish!! thanks.
@Eric, wow thank you very much :D
@shashi, Many thanks
@Claudia, glad you like this verse 'white pearl teeth' - it matches beautifully with your picture and thank you for your comments.
@wysteria, thank you for your comment, i would love to hear what it was you found interesting?